Will someone proof read and see if improvement is needed

Question

I never can remember catagories and how to add them but I hope it looks better now. If not drop me a line please.

Answer 1

Sounds like he had a fascinating life and you captured it well! I would add some citations and links (when possible) to sources, but the biography is a great story and one his ancestors and those interested in that time period are going to be eager to read! Great job!