I looked over his profile, and it appears that you have made some updates. Might I make one recommendation?
There's information in the profile that talks about his grandson that is somewhat confusing, as the first time I scanned through, I missed the reference and thought this was about him as well, only many years later. You might mark these by separating them somehow so that it's clear that certain key data is about him, and the other is not. Or better - you might just put the grandson information in the grandson's profile, which would make his profile much clearer.
However, I am beginning to see a clearer picture of him with your recent edits, and I think if you were to biographicize (is that a real word...?) instead of bullet out some of his information, I think it would help. I also find it helpful to line things up in order like a timeline, so that he got a job, got married, traveled, went to war, came back, had kids, started a business, etc. and it flows like his life. Others prefer the topical approach, where you discuss his occupations, his family, his awards, his political career - all as separate topics in the biography. Either way should clarify things. Just a suggestion, though. If biography writing is not your favorite thing, then I understand. My biographies tend to be pretty wooden and sort of a Dragnet approach ("just the facts").